IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Young people these days tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past. What are the causes and give your solutions?

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200614
TOPIC: Young people these days tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past. What are the causes and give your solutions?
Answer 1
There are some young people today who lack relevant knowledge about social rules and do not show respect to others. People should take action to address this situation and cannot overlook the problems arising from this.
Many factors result from these poor behaviors. Parents spoil many young people today, who are ...
By James, 2020-06-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 318
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(16) THEY(8) ARE(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 9.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
You need to balance the structure. The reason and solution should be half to half. The first reason took too long.
Answer 2
Lately, it has been observed that adolescents have lost a sense of admiration and humility towards other people. While I agree with time, we evolve and grow with the worldly drifts; sabotaging bonds, and human relations are significant losses.
Since the beginning of globalization, the interconnectedness between ...
By Atif, 2020-06-29  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 299
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Structure and language skills are ok, but logic isn't strong. You should have an international view to answer the question. "past verse future", not "east verse west". "westernization" shouldn't occur in the topic.