TOPIC: Young people these days tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past. What are the causes and give your solutions.
There are some young people today who lack relevant knowledge about social rules and do not show respect to others. People should take action to address this situation and cannot overlook the problems arising from this.
Many factors result from these poor behaviors. Parents spoil many young people today, who are ...
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- You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(16) THEY(8) ARE(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
- High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
- Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
- Obvious Grammar Errors: 9>.
You need to balance the structure. The reason and solution should be half to half. The first reason took too long.