IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people think that new technology always improves the lives of workers. Other people believe that it results in disadvantages for workers. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200618
TOPIC: Some people think that new technology always improves the lives of workers. Other people believe that it results in disadvantages for workers. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.
Answer 1
The advent of new technology has brought a dramatic change in the work environment. While some people believe that this has made their work lives better, many others believe that the rise of new technology has had a detrimental effect on them. This essay will elucidate both these viewpoints and also provides opinion on ...
By Nisha, 2020-08-05  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 349
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has HAS(16) TECHNOLOGY(9) AND(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Paragraph 2 seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation, but there are rather some errors for a higher band here.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 2
It is indeed true that modern technology has equipped masses with machines. There are positive and negative effects of these machines on workers of any organisation. Some people are divided on the issue that this technological advancement results in disadvantageous for them. However, others oppine that it improves ...
By Manpreet , 2020-07-30  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 275
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident; however, the answer lacks contextualization, and cohesion within sentences is sometimes faulty.
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Lexical Resources:
-There is some good use of vocabulary, but spelling errors are noticeable, even very simple words.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as predicate verb.
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Answer 3
There is no doubt that advancement in technology has improved the lives of workers. While there are many benefits to new technology, there are also some drawbacks to be considered. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and voice my opinion with appropriate examples.
In recent years advancement in ...
By vikrant, 2020-09-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 265
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but by the question, you should handle "both the views" equally, then give your position.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, but the essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.