IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Most employers do job interviews before offering a position to a person. Do you think this is the best way to do it or are there better alternatives? What is the best method of choosing employees in your opinion?

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200620
TOPIC: Most employers do job interviews before offering a position to a person. Do you think this is the best way to do it or are there better alternatives? What is the best method of choosing employees in your opinion?
Answer 1
The job interview has become a very common way to find the appropriate person to work worldwide. Some people ponder that it is not a suitable way for recruitment, and employers should take written and aptitude tests to find a hidden talent. In my opinion, writing and reasoning tests also give equal importance to ...
By jarry, 2020-09-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 352
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(10) PERSON(8) JOB(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident, with some simple cohesive devices, but sometimes used inaccurately.
-Some sentences are wordy or too long to understand.Use too many passive voice sentences.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammar and punctuation are well controlled, but punctuation and capitalization are also sometimes faulty.
Answer 2
A vast majority of recruiters conduct interviews in order to hire new workers. Although it can be considered an appropriate method, there are still other measures by which this can be done. I, however, believe that distinct methods should be adopted according to the type of job for which the staff is needed.
First ...
By KM, 2020-07-13  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 287
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
The response is excellent in both logic and structure, your language skills are good too, but passive voice sentences seem too many.
Answer 3
Choosing a correct employee has been a top priority for any organisation today. Conducting interviews plays a pivotal role in selecting the right employee and also considered as the old and best method. I agree with the given statement. I will also discuss other alternative methods that an employer could use to choose ...
By sairam nittala , 2020-07-13  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 279
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(6) CANDIDATE(6) FOR(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 9.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
The response is excellent in both logic and structure, but you need to enhance vocabulary skills to get a better score.
Answer 4
Selecting the correct candidate for a job has become very difficult as there are fewer job openings and more candidates. Employers prefer to do a job interview before hiring, which might not be the best hiring method.
There are other alternatives in selecting an employee.
There might be a situation when the ...
By Drashti, 2020-07-28  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 269
AI Comment:
  • You had better rewrite the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(7) JOB(6) EMPLOYEE(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Paragraphing is poorly handled, with some paragraphs consisting of a single sentence.
Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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