IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Nowadays, pollution and waste levels are increasing rapidly. How does this affect ordinary people? What steps can be taken to overcome this problem?

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200627
TOPIC: Nowadays, pollution and waste levels are increasing rapidly. How does this affect ordinary people? What steps can be taken to overcome this problem?
Answer 1
In recent years, urbanization and materialization have brought a surge in pollutant emission and amount of waste, which has caused plenty of detrimental influences on human beings' life. This essay will delve into the impacts and the solutions to these issues.
Because of the rising usage of vehicles, air pollution ...
By NL, 2020-07-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 289
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a wide range of structures, these are used flexibly; however, there are occasional errors in punctuation.
Answer 2
It is irrefutable that polluting contents and the amount of waste is growing at a very fast pace, in this modern era. There are several hazardous effects of this trend, which will be discussed in this essay, and also the active initiatives to tackle the current situation.
To commence with, it has various negative ...
By Simmi, 2020-07-04  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 296
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Good essay. Don't write too long sentences, which are hard to read and easy to cause grammar issues.
Answer 3
In the world of modernization, contamination of the environment and trash levels are rising drastically these days. It is an undeniable truth that people are polluting a surrounding atmosphere willingly or unwillingly. There are diverse impacts on the human being, and some potential solutions can be taken to reduce it ...
By Vaimik, 2020-07-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 261
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 10.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Excellent essay, try to avoid some tiny syntax defects.
Answer 4
While the 19th Century was an age of industrious, numerous investors introduce capital in the form of manufacturing and mechanical developments. The manufacturing industry, however, exhausts chemicals that cause air pollution and waste, which harms severe effects on human lives. This essay will examine the root cause ...
By Muhammad Farhan, 2020-07-08  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 352
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Excellent essay, the response is good but the original version has some grammar and vocabulary issues.
Answer 5
In this modern era, the number of pollution and waste levels are increasing. With this, the local person's life is going in danger. To reduce this difficulty, some action will be necessary. I will discuss its effect and steps in the rest of the paragraphs.
To begin with, the first and foremost influence on persons ...
By Sukh , 2020-07-05  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 309
AI Comment:
  • You had better rewrite the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(8) WILL(4) THIS(3); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
The logic is ok, but both grammar and logic need to enhance.
Answer 6
The uncontrolled irresponsible behavior of human beings, causing an exponential rise in amounts of pollution and litter, which in turn has a reverse impact on the lives of ordinary people. Considering the gravity of the matter , I will suggest some plausible solutions to tackle the menace.
The indiscriminating ...
By Munish Mittal, 2020-07-06  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 250
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has FOR(4) HUMAN(3) BEINGS(3); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • You can improve coherence and cohesion by sharpening sentences and paragraphs with accurate linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
You didn't answer "How does this affect ordinary people." Besides, please improve your vocabulary skills. Too many "un-" words hurt your essay.
Answer 7
The rate of growth in pollution and contamination levels have been exponential these days. This adverse effect has a direct impact on mankind by deteriorating the quality of life and prone to get attacked by various diseases, thereby reducing the life span of the people. There needs to be awareness among the people ...
Total words: 279
AI Comment:
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
The question is based on "How does this pollution affect ordinary people." You left the topic a little far in the second paragraph.