IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Nowadays, pollution and waste levels are increasing rapidly. How does this affect ordinary people? What steps can be taken to overcome this problem?

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200627
TOPIC: Nowadays, pollution and waste levels are increasing rapidly. How does this affect ordinary people? What steps can be taken to overcome this problem?
Answer 1
In recent years, urbanization and materialization have brought a surge in pollutant emission and amount of waste, which has caused plenty of detrimental influences on human beings' life. This essay will delve into the impacts and the solutions to these issues.
Because of the rising usage of vehicles, air pollution ...
By NL, 2020-07-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 289
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a wide range of structures, these are used flexibly; however, there are occasional errors in punctuation.
Answer 2
It is irrefutable that polluting contents and the amount of waste is growing at a very fast pace, in this modern era. There are several hazardous effects of this trend, which will be discussed in this essay, and also the active initiatives to tackle the current situation.
To commence with, it has various negative ...
By Simmi, 2020-07-04  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 296
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Good essay. Don't write too long sentences, which are hard to read and easy to cause grammar issues.
Answer 3
In the world of modernization, contamination of the environment and trash levels are rising drastically these days. It is an undeniable truth that people are polluting a surrounding atmosphere willingly or unwillingly. There are diverse impacts on the human being, and some potential solutions can be taken to reduce it ...
By Vaimik, 2020-07-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 261
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 10.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Excellent essay, try to avoid some tiny syntax defects.
Answer 4
While the 19th Century was an age of industrious, numerous investors introduce capital in the form of manufacturing and mechanical developments. The manufacturing industry, however, exhausts chemicals that cause air pollution and waste, which harms severe effects on human lives. This essay will examine the root cause ...
By Muhammad Farhan, 2020-07-08  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 352
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Excellent essay, the response is good but the original version has some grammar and vocabulary issues.
Answer 5
It is often argued that the introduction of urbanization gives birth to several environmental problems such as pollution and garbage level. Due to this, common people are suffering. This essay intends to analyze how ordinary people being affected by it and some possible solutions to curb this issue.
To begin with, ...
By Manpreet, 2020-07-29  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 285
AI Comment:
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-There are spelling errors, even very simple words.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Punctuation and capitalization are also sometimes faulty.
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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Answer 6
There has been substantial growth in the level of pollution and waste these days, which poses health problems for human beings. Stringent action by the government needs to be taken to contain this malaise.
First and foremost, a decrease in the quality of air threatens human life by giving birth to numerous diseases ...
By Navpreet Kaur, 2020-08-26  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 315
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
-Some grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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Answer 7
The levels of greenhouse gases and garbage are rising quickly with the increase in population. This gradual increase in the levels of pollution affects human beings in ample ways. The following paragraphs will describe the effects and steps that can be taken to reduce the causes of pollution.
There is no denying the ...
By Samruddhi, 2020-09-14  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 325
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(17) POLLUTION(5) AFFECT(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Some sentences are too long to understand.Use too many passive voice sentences.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A few grammatical errors, such as article (a, an, the).
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Answer 8
In this modern era, the number of pollution and waste levels are increasing. With this, the local person's life is going in danger. To reduce this difficulty, some action will be necessary. I will discuss its effect and steps in the rest of the paragraphs.
To begin with, the first and foremost influence on persons ...
By Sukh , 2020-07-05  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 309
AI Comment:
  • You had better rewrite the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(8) WILL(4) THIS(3); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
The logic is ok, but both grammar and logic need to enhance.
Answer 9
The uncontrolled irresponsible behavior of human beings, causing an exponential rise in amounts of pollution and litter, which in turn has a reverse impact on the lives of ordinary people. Considering the gravity of the matter , I will suggest some plausible solutions to tackle the menace.
The indiscriminating ...
By Munish Mittal, 2020-07-06  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 250
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has FOR(4) HUMAN(3) BEINGS(3); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • You can improve coherence and cohesion by sharpening sentences and paragraphs with accurate linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
You didn't answer "How does this affect ordinary people." Besides, please improve your vocabulary skills. Too many "un-" words hurt your essay.
Answer 10
The rate of growth in pollution and contamination levels have been exponential these days. This adverse effect has a direct impact on mankind by deteriorating the quality of life and prone to get attacked by various diseases, thereby reducing the life span of the people. There needs to be awareness among the people ...
By thor, 2020-07-12  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 279
AI Comment:
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
The question is based on "How does this pollution affect ordinary people." You left the topic a little far in the second paragraph.
Answer 11
In this modern era, environmental issues are the major problem that everyone faces. The rate of pollution and waste level is augmenting day by day. As a result, this can bring many health issues to ordinary people. In my opinion, there are many ways to tackle these issues by avoid plastics, awareness programs, and ...
By jacob, 2020-07-31  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 359
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has THAT(10) AND(9) ARE(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 8.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-The solution part is too weak; you talk too much about "plastics."
-The prompt is not fully addressed, there is an attempt to discuss some benefits and disadvantages, but ideas are limited.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident, with some simple cohesive devices, but sometimes used inaccurately.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-The variety of structures would suggest Band 6 on Grammar, but the errors sometimes impede communication.
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-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as predicate verb.
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Answer 12
In the fast-paced world, modernization of industrialized nations, the earth's atmosphere is getting polluted to an alarming rate. In this essay, we are going to discuss after meth on human life, and possible measures can be adopted to avoid such issues.
Firstly, it's a bitter truth for the inhabitant of this green ...
By Alpha, 2020-08-14  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 297
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-Only partially address the prompt, The essay doesn't address the "affecting" and "solution." You need to restructure the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident; however, the answer lacks contextualization, and cohesion within sentences is sometimes faulty.
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Lexical Resources:
-There is some good use of vocabulary, but spelling errors are noticeable.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Use a variety of complex structures, but the writing lacks grammatical control.
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Answer 13
In the current scenario, the world has been suffering from myriad burning issues, and pollution and waste are the most concerning problems in front of society. This essay will discuss both: its impact on people's lives and highlight plausible solutions to tackle it.
To begin with, these days, a worsening environment ...
By nirav, 2020-08-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 264
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
- Help Link
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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-Don't write long sentences intentionally, which will hurt your essay.