IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people say that educational success most of the time depends on having a good teacher. Others say that student attitudes also do matters. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200704
TOPIC: Some people say that educational success most of the time depends on having a good teacher. Others say that student attitudes also do matters. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Answer 1
Certainly, it is irresistible that education plays a significant role in shaping the future of children. Some proponents claim that students can achieve their success if they have the best educator; however, opponents assert that student's attitudes toward the academic are also matters. In the looming paragraphs, I ...
By greena, 2020-08-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 306
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7.5
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-Substitution is usually good, although there is some repetition.
-There is a good range of vocabulary, and there are some less common words and phrases
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy.
Answer 2
Whether the progress of students relies on having an excellent mentor or on individuals' efforts, has become a controversial issue. While some individuals consider that tutors have a vital role in their success, others believe that pupils' concern towards studies is also responsible. This essay will discuss both sides ...
By KM, 2020-07-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 303
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response, but the conclusion is unclear and needs to enhance.
Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.
Answer 3
In today's scenario, education plays a crucial role in becoming successful in life. Some people believe that most of the credit goes to the teacher. However, others think that a student's attitude towards the study also exists in this matter. This essay will intend to discuss both perspectives.
To begin with, ...
By Manpreet , 2020-07-26  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 302
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-There is some good use of vocabulary, but spelling errors are noticeable.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-The variety of structures would suggest Band 6 on Grammar, but the errors sometimes impede communication.
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Answer 4
People have different opinions about whether the academic success of students relies on their attitude or their teachers. While a good teacher paves the way for students, I feel that it is eventually students' own attitude that can bring about success.
Good teachers guide students on how to perform well in their ...
By Har, 2020-08-01  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 255
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
- Help Link
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.
Answer 5
It is a widely held belief that the teacher plays an influential role in a student's life to score well in studies. Still, a strong counter-argument amongst the section of people is that the dedication of the learner is inevitable to perform well. However, I believe that this is a matter to be debated in the lights of ...
By Richa, 2020-08-14  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 352
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • You can improve coherence and cohesion by sharpening sentences and paragraphs with accurate linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident, with some simple cohesive devices, but sometimes used inaccurately, some sentences are wordy or too long to understand
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Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few spelling errors.
Answer 6
Education is one of the important aspects of any person's life. A section of society is of the view that an efficient tutor is a key to success in academics. In contrast, others believe that the student's approach towards studies plays a vital role in acquiring quality education. Both viewpoints will be analysed before ...
By Navpreet Kaur, 2020-08-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 290
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 2.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but without good examples.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
- Help Link
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Some grammatical errors, such as nouns (singular, plural).
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Answer 7
Educational success is always a matter to be debated upon. We have seen arguments on the importance of good teachers as well as the attitude of the student, whenever this topic comes to table. I will discuss both the views and conclude by giving out my opinion and why I think it is so.
Yes, growing up children might ...
By louie jr, 2020-08-11  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 344
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(9) STUDENT(6) CAN(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-There is some good use of vocabulary, but shouldn't use "kid or kids" in academic writing.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 8
In this era of the internet, information about any topic is easily accessible to everyone around the globe. While this generation focuses on learning on their own, many still prefer to learn from teachers in a traditional way by going to school colleges or getting personal tutors. In my opinion, self-learning and ...
By Nisha, 2020-07-17  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 345
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(10) THEIR(9) ATTITUDE(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
The essay misses the focus "teacher and student, who is critical;" shouldn't matter with "the era of the internet" or "self-learning". Besides, you should present views from two sides by the question.
Answer 9
Recently a Harvard scholar proved that the success of a student comes by the hands of a teacher. While others argued, it is the student who is responsible for his or her educational attainments. This essay discusses both sides' arguments.
In the case of teachers, they are like motivational speakers who can motivate ...
By Sayed Akber Hoshen, 2020-07-18  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 300
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has GOOD(8) STUDENT(6) HIS(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Try to use paragraphs to present ideas logically.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of lexis isn't generally adequate and appropriate.
- Help Link
-Some spelling errors are noted; the essay's vocabulary is too plain.
- Help Link
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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Answer 10
In today's dynamic world, educational success is directly associated with general success in life, which, to a high degree, is correct. Many experts have argued whether having a good teacher does most of the work or the attitude of the student also plays a role in educational success.
I personally feel that having a ...
By Nikhil Sharda, 2020-07-18  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 374
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • You had better rewrite the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(14) TEACHER(13) WITH(9); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Conclusion seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy and not in the style that academic writing should be in. Your examples aren't good.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Paragraphing is poorly handled, with some paragraphs consisting of a single sentence. (in the original version)
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
Answer 11
In modern days, there is a sparked heated debate on student's academic success in many parts of the world. Some postulate that school students achieve success due to their good professors. On the other hand, many believe that pupils' approach towards education is an inevitable factor as well. We will delve both sides ...
By Vaimik Patel, 2020-07-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 256
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy.
- You should present views from two sides by the question, the second view is too weak.
Answer 12
It is a highly debatable issue, whether a guide or students themselves are responsible for achieving success in academics. I believe that good results are the outcome of collaborated efforts of both.
Educational success depends on many factors. However, many argue that a good teacher helps students to get good ...
By Neha, 2020-07-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 294
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has STUDENTS(12) AND(9) THEIR(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Some cohesive devices are used effectively, while others are faulty.
- Help Link
Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
- Help Link
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There are quite frequent errors in punctuation.
Answer 13
Education is the most important aspect of any country all over the world. It plays a vital role in developing the culture of the cities and also improved the lifestyle of the people. Very few of the academic institutions or colleges are having the staff with well-disciplined and knowledgable ideas.
To have a ...
By Utkarsh Raval, 2020-07-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 320
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(10) STUDENTS(7) ALSO(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-You should present views from two sides by the question, but only partially address the prompt, The second paragraph is off the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident; however, the answer lacks contextualization, and cohesion within sentences is sometimes faulty.
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Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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Answer 14
Education and educational institutions play a crucial role in society. Teachers who are worshipped as god really have an important role to play, but at the same time, students do need to put their efforts along with teachers.
As we know, teachers help us to clear our doubts and confusion and helps us in every way ...
By Muskan singh, 2020-07-25  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 311
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is wordy, suggest to simplify it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(11) THEIR(6) STUDENTS(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-You should present views from two sides by the question. The essay's structure isn't good.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident, with some simple cohesive devices, but sometimes used inaccurately.
- Help Link
Lexical Resources:
-The range of lexis isn't generally adequate and appropriate.
- Help Link
-Errors occur in word choice, word formation, and spelling, e.g "achieve."
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as nouns (singular, plural).
- Help Link1, Help Link2
Answer 15
The majority of people claim that the mentor is the main reason for the achievements attained by the students in the educational field. In contrast, some people believe that apart from tutors, role student's attention is also a must. In my perception, both the guru and the children's interests are crucial for ...
By PARVESH, 2020-08-06  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 368
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has STUDENTS(8) FOR(7) AND(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 8.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
- Help Link
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as nouns (singular, plural).
- Help Link1, Help Link2
Answer 16
, It cannot be denied that teachers play a crucial part in our ladder to educational success. There are split opinions regarding teachers that educational success the majority of the time relies on having excellent teachers, whereas another group of thinkers advocates attitudes of students mostly matters. However, ...
By Faeeza Master, 2020-08-06  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 321
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • Paragraph 1 is relatively short, enrich it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has STUDENTS(10) ARE(8) TEACHERS(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task,
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-The variety of structures would suggest Band 6 on Grammar, but the errors sometimes impede communication.
- Help Link
Answer 17
Education is one of the key factors for a successful life. Teachers play a vital role in the education system. Some group of masses believes that teachers are solely responsible for student's educational success while others support the idea that it also depends on the student's mindset. In my perspective, both ...
By Prince, 2020-08-17  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 255
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has STUDENTS(14) FOR(9) EDUCATION(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Some cohesive devices are used effectively, while others are faulty.
- Help Link
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
- Help Link
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors, such as nouns (singular, plural).
- Help Link1, Help Link2
Answer 18
Many people opine that a good tutor is a key for academic success whilst some assert, that the attitude of the student also plays a vital role. This essay discusses both points of view and reckons the idea that the major part of one's educational success depends on his attitude.
A good teacher is a great resource of ...
By sharma, 2020-08-18  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 264
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
- Help Link
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as nouns (singular, plural).
- Help Link1, Help Link2
-There are some errors in sentence formation and/or punctuation.
- Help Link