IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people say that educational success most of the time depends on having a good teacher. Others say that student attitudes also do matters. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200704
TOPIC: Some people say that educational success most of the time depends on having a good teacher. Others say that student attitudes also do matters. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Answer 1
Whether the progress of students relies on having an excellent mentor or on individuals' efforts, has become a controversial issue. While some individuals consider that tutors have a vital role in their success, others believe that pupils' concern towards studies is also responsible. This essay will discuss both sides ...
By KM, 2020-07-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 303
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response, but the conclusion is unclear and needs to enhance.
Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.
Answer 2
In this era of the internet, information about any topic is easily accessible to everyone around the globe. While this generation focuses on learning on their own, many still prefer to learn from teachers in a traditional way by going to school colleges or getting personal tutors. In my opinion, self-learning and ...
By Nisha, 2020-07-17  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 345
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(10) THEIR(9) ATTITUDE(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
The essay misses the focus "teacher and student, who is critical;" shouldn't matter with "the era of the internet" or "self-learning". Besides, you should present views from two sides by the question.
Answer 3
Recently a Harvard scholar proved that the success of a student comes by the hands of a teacher. While others argued, it is the student who is responsible for his or her educational attainments. This essay discusses both sides' arguments.
In the case of teachers, they are like motivational speakers who can motivate ...
By Sayed Akber Hoshen, 2020-07-18  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 300
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has GOOD(8) STUDENT(6) HIS(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Try to use paragraphs to present ideas logically.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of lexis isn't generally adequate and appropriate.
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-Some spelling errors are noted; the essay's vocabulary is too plain.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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Answer 4
In today's dynamic world, educational success is directly associated with general success in life, which, to a high degree, is correct. Many experts have argued whether having a good teacher does most of the work or the attitude of the student also plays a role in educational success.
I personally feel that having a ...
By Nikhil Sharda, 2020-07-18  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 374
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • You had better rewrite the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(14) TEACHER(13) WITH(9); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Conclusion seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy and not in the style that academic writing should be in. Your examples aren't good.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Paragraphing is poorly handled, with some paragraphs consisting of a single sentence. (in the original version)
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
Answer 5
In modern days, there is a sparked heated debate on student's academic success in many parts of the world. Some postulate that school students achieve success due to their good professors. On the other hand, many believe that pupils' approach towards education is an inevitable factor as well. We will delve both sides ...
By Vaimik Patel, 2020-07-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 256
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy.
- You should present views from two sides by the question, the second view is too weak.
Answer 6
It is a highly debatable issue, whether a guide or students themselves are responsible for achieving success in academics. I believe that good results are the outcome of collaborated efforts of both.
Educational success depends on many factors. However, many argue that a good teacher helps students to get good ...
Total words: 294
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has STUDENTS(12) AND(9) THEIR(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Some cohesive devices are used effectively, while others are faulty.
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Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There are quite frequent errors in punctuation.
Answer 7
Education is the most important aspect of any country all over the world. It plays a vital role in developing the culture of the cities and also improved the lifestyle of the people. Very few of the academic institutions or colleges are having the staff with well-disciplined and knowledgable ideas.
To have a ...
By Utkarsh Raval, 2020-07-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 320
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(10) STUDENTS(7) ALSO(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-You should present views from two sides by the question, but only partially address the prompt, The second paragraph is off the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident; however, the answer lacks contextualization, and cohesion within sentences is sometimes faulty.
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Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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