IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Many people in today’s society enjoy watching movies or TV programs about crime. What makes them so appealing to people? What is the impact of this on individuals and society?

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4201017
TOPIC: Many people in today’s society enjoy watching movies or TV programs about crime. What makes them so appealing to people? What is the impact of this on individuals and society?
Answer 1
Crime is always an attractive topic for people. Recently, It becomes one of the most common subjects in movies and tv show programs, since a huge proportion of people enjoy it. Human curiosity about scary and forbidden things is the main reason that leads them to watch movies about crime. However, this behavior may ...
By Hasna Ab, 2020-11-02  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 306
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(13) THEY(8) PEOPLE(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 8.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7.5
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-A range of cohesive devices is used flexibly, while each paragraph has a clear central topic that is developed.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a good range of vocabulary, and there are some less common words and phrases.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy.
Answer 2
In today's world, It is very common for people to enjoy screen time in crime-related programmes. What would be the reason why people tend to enjoy such movies or programmes? Would this be having an adverse effect on society? This essay would briefly discuss the topic with examples and observations and would be ...
By eddie, 2020-11-11  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 342
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has WITH(7) SHOWS(7) WOULD(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 8.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-Off-topic a little, there is no enough discussion of the "impact" part.
-The prompt is not fully addressed, there is an attempt to discuss, but ideas are limited.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few spelling errors.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 3
In this contemporary era, it has been universally acknowledged that most individuals choose to watch suspense and thriller crime films or TV series, as it gives them a thrilling experience. There are various reasons behind the increasing interest in watching these kinds of films, and paying too much attention to crime ...
By Ramandeep kour, 2020-11-03  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 382
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression in the response, but somewhat mechanically, with occasional errors.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few spelling errors.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 4
I am largely in agreement with the popularity of television programs and movies based on crime. But aren't they interesting? I, myself, love watching programs showing how criminals try to achieve their agendas while innocent people suffer. Ultimately, actors or people with a very positive mindset win the situation in ...
By Richa, 2020-10-31  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 271
AI Comment:
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • The conclusion is wordy, suggest to simplify it.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-The ideas presented are not always developed and or relevant, the structure should be enhanced.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression in the response, but somewhat mechanically, with occasional errors.Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-The variety of structures would suggest Band 6 on Grammar, but the errors sometimes impede communication.
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Answer 5
The fact is beyond doubt that most people like to watch movies and Tv programs that show crimes of day-to-day life in different aspects. Like a coin has two sides, such interest of people also has benefits as well as drawbacks.
On one side, there are enormous advantages of ...
By kavita, 2020-10-29  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 303
AI Comment:
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • Paragraph 3 is relatively short, enrich it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has PEOPLE(10) ARE(8) AND(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 2.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-Off-topic a little, the raters may doubt the essay is memorized, please prepare topics (not essays) in advance. The reason part is too weak; the essay's structure isn't balanced.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident, with some simple cohesive devices, but sometimes used inaccurately.
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Lexical Resources:
-Some spelling errors are noted; the essay's vocabulary is too plain.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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Answer 6
Many people believe that crime-related movies and web series have been renowned among individuals from the last decade. The majority of folks believe that it provides a thrill to viewers and is aware of crimes happening in society. It has both positive and negative impacts on individual thinking ability. ...
By jarry, 2020-11-01  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 363
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(20) MOVIES(8) THAT(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-Only partially address the prompt. Didn't answer "What makes them so appealing to people."
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-The variety of structures would suggest Band 6 on Grammar, but the errors sometimes impede communication.
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Answer 7
The entertainment industry has been growing rapidly in the past few years, providing plenty of genre choices for its consumers. Additionally, technological advancement in Internet usage provides easy access to movies and shows of one's choice. The trend shows that shows with violence are on the rise depicting more ...
By ankita, 2020-11-02  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 340
AI Comment:
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 9.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-The reason part is too weak; the essay's structure isn't balanced.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident; however, the answer lacks contextualization, and cohesion within sentences is sometimes faulty.Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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