In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or animal products, such as clothing and medicines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

 IELTS General Essay Answers - #6094
Question:
In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or animal products, such as clothing and medicines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
You can choose either agreeing or disagreeing. The latter is relatively easy to write. You had better cover food, clothing, and medicine areas in your answer.

Agree
  • Synthetic materials and artificial replacements are continuously developed
  • Clothing and medicine already use lots of non-animal materials
  • More and more people decrease animal consumption in food
Disagree
  • Synthetic materials cannot wholly replace animal products
  • Animals are still crucial in food production and drug trials
  • Some artificial replacements cost too high for ordinary people
  • The animal food chain is a part of nature's rules.
Answer 1
In the 21st century, modern technology has changed the world profoundly. Some people argue that we now have various elements and substances that can replace animals to produce meals and supply to the medical and garment industry. Although I agree with this trend, I also argue that we still need animal products.
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By Beiwan Lee, 2022-04-28  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 288
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt. But some ideas aren't supported with clear examples, a better way is to discuss food, clothing, and medicine separately.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy.