Young people these days tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past. What are the causes and give your solutions?

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Question:
Young people these days tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past. What are the causes and give your solutions?
Answer Hints:
Mixed topic. Your answer should include two parts: causes and solutions.

Causes
  • Schools focus on academic courses and spend less time on culture and polite education.
  • Young people copy and follow adults; now adults are less polite than in the past, youth just learn their styles.
  • Popular culture idols, either powerful or intelligent, polite isn't necessary and even seems ridiculous.
Solutions
  • If we hope children and grandchild are polite, parents and grandparents should be polite at first. President and congress members should act in polite as their positions.
  • In movies and games, polite should get more rewards than coarse; we need to create polite idols for young people.
  • Schools may offer courses about why polite is essential and how to be polite.
Answer 1
Nowadays, youngsters are quite disrespectful as well as impolite as compare to past days. There could be several causes of this problem. The most significant is modern technology and a busy lifestyle. I believe that a joint effort from parents and schools may help young people to behave politely.
The major reason ...
By Manpreet , 2020-09-30  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 330
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt. But the solution part is weak; the essay's structure isn't balanced.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
- Help Link
-Some sentences are wordy or too long to understand.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Some grammatical errors, such as nouns (singular, plural).
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Answer 2
Moral values, such as being polite with others, and respect their elders, play a vital role in youngster life. However, nowadays, they are behaving very badly and disrespectfully with their guardian and teachers. There is an ample number of reasons for this problem. This essay will discuss the root cause of this ...
By Jarry, 2020-09-25  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 376
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
- Help Link
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling,
-Repeating words and phrases, like "There is an umpteen number of."
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 3
There are some young people today who lack relevant knowledge about social rules and do not show respect to others. People should take action to address this situation and cannot overlook the problems arising from this.
Many factors result from these poor behaviors. Parents spoil many young people today, who are ...
By James, 2020-06-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 318
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
You need to balance the structure. The reason and solution should be half to half. The first reason took too long.
Answer 4
Lately, it has been observed that adolescents have lost a sense of admiration and humility towards other people. While I agree with time, we evolve and grow with the worldly drifts; sabotaging bonds, and human relations are significant losses.
Since the beginning of globalization, the interconnectedness between ...
By Atif, 2020-06-29  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 299
Band: 5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Structure and language skills are ok, but logic isn't strong. You should have an international view to answer the question. "past verse future", not "east verse west". "westernization" shouldn't occur in the topic.