Today due to advanced medicine, people are living longer. Therefore, the number of elders is expected to exceed young people. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Question:
Today, due to advanced medicine, people are living longer. Therefore, the number of elders is expected to exceed that of young people. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Answer Hints:
Advantages or disadvantages question. You can choose either one as your argument.

Advantages
  • Live longer is good for all people; young people will live longer too.
  • Seniors have a chance to work longer and contribute more to society.
  • Seniors' experiences and knowledge help youth building life and family with fewer mistakes.
Disadvantages
  • The fewer youth, the less workforce in society.
  • Society needs to allocate more resources, like medicine, to look after seniors.
  • When three or four generations live together, the family conflict may increase.
Answer 1
These days, medicine has achieved incredible results, and many people can live longer. This trend has resulted in numerous debates...

On the one hand, it is undeniable that modern medicine has made tremendous improvements and can cure most diseases...

However, certain advantages may play an indispensable role for the whole community. First and foremost, senior citizens can significantly contribute to sharing helpful knowledge and valuable experience with younger ones...

In conclusion, I again reaffirm my position that medicine has enhanced life expectancy. However, authorities should find ways to satisfy the young and old generation's job requirements...
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