In some countries, too much money is spent by both the government and individuals on national festivals, such as the new year. To what extent do you agree?

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Question:
In some countries, too much money is spent by both the government and individuals on national festivals, such as the new year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
You can either support or object to the view. On the supportive side, explain why not spend money on festivals. If opposed, explain why the money is not much or is justified. Pay attention to discussing on both the government and individuals.

Support
  • Many places are still short of money.
  • Festival consumption usually causes lots of waste.
  • Impact other investments and development chances.
Object
  • Festival consumption is positive for the economy.
  • Spending money to celebrate festivals adjusts stress in working.
  • Festivals activities add connections among both family and society.
Answer 1
Some people think the government and individuals are spending too much money on national festivals. While I agree that those celebrations cost a significant amount of money, I would argue that this activity is necessary and therefore can be considered acceptable.
Indeed, the government and individuals have spent a ...
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