Residents of cities are indeed hard to get sufficient physical activities. There are several causes of this issue, and some solutions could be proposed to help people to promote the rate of physical exercise.
There are many reasons why most people feel hard in exercising although they all know it is suitable for ...
Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some. E.g. it's easy to add some examples to both cause and solution parts.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are logically organized, and there is a clear progression throughout the response.Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.