It is difficult for people who live in cities to get enough physical exercise. What causes and solutions can be taken to solve the problem?

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Question:
It is difficult for people who live in cities to get enough physical exercise. What causes this? What solutions can be taken to solve the problem?
Answer Hints:
The topic needs you to answer causes and solutions. You also need to pay attention to the connections of causes and solutions you rasied.

Causes
  • Please ignore or don't know the importance of physical exercise.
  • Busy in working and job, no time to spend on physical exercise.
  • Diverse entertainment decreases the time for physical exercise.
  • Cities generally lack land and facilities for physical exercise.
Solutions
  • Governments promote physical exercise to add awareness.
  • Add physical exercise facilities in communities.
  • Add cycle lanes or walk side to promote a green and healthy lifestyle.
  • Encorage people to live a balanced life, leaving time for leisure, especially for physical exercise.
Answer 1
Residents of cities find it hard to get sufficient physical activities. There are several causes of this issue, and some solutions could be proposed to help people to promote the rate of physical exercise...

There are many reasons why most people exercise little, although they all know it is good for their health...

Nowadays, governments are trying some solutions to bring people more physical exercise. The first would be building more parks where people can walk or do activities such as aerobics and yoga...

In conclusion, the reasons why physical exercise is insufficient in cities are apparent, and on the other hand, there are some positive solutions to mitigate the trend effectively...
Band: 6.5
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Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but some are not developed much. It's easy to add some examples to both the cause and solution parts.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are logically organized, and the response has a clear progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite broad and shows awareness of collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.