A big salary is much more important than job satisfaction

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Question:
A big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.
Answer 1
Some people prefer a high-salary job no matter if they like it. From my point of view, I'm afraid I have to disagree with this opinion and believe that job satisfaction is more important than a big salary...

First of all, job satisfaction gives the employees happiness in their life. While some workers stay in work extra hours to gain more incentive, others finish their work on time and go out to participate in other activities like meeting friends, spending more time with family, or going to a club...

Furthermore, job satisfaction maintains your health and keeps you away from illness. People who want more income must work all days of the year without holidays and work under stress to make more achievements...

To conclude, it appears that the benefits of job satisfaction are more important than a high salary...
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Top 300 Words148 (51%)62 (40%)41%
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Over 1000 Words69 (24%)52 (34%)75%
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Link Words: 23 (including link phrase: 1)
Sentences: Number: 16; Average Length: 104 characters; Words/Sentence: 17
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(10), more(8), job(6), their(6), people(5), that(5), than(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Answer 2
It is often argued that choosing a job with a high wage is more advantageous, even if it doesn't appeal to you at all...

First, I believe job satisfaction gives people a sense of fulfillment that no money can guarantee...

Secondly, doing what you like motivates you and leads to career growth. In other words, there is a strong relationship between job satisfaction and productivity...

To conclude, I firmly believe that job satisfaction is more beneficial than a high salary because it makes people happy and motivated...
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