IELTS General Writing Task 2

IELTS writing tasks' topics, answers, and comments.

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By TNJ, 2018-12-02  
Band: NA (Total words: 206)
Comment:
  • The essay is less than 250, doesn't match the basic criteria.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
 IELTS General Writing Task 2 - Topic, Answer, and Comment
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

You should write at least 250 words.
Goal of success is no doubt difficult to achieve but not impossible to reach. Pillars of road to success comprises of distinctive and solid roots which includes not only money but other aspects also. This essay will discuss that.
Money is always considered as one of the element in every phase of a life. It undoubtedly provides luxury, though even eliminates a lot of daily life troubles.Money can only give materialistic pride not the inner peace. Perhaps, there are other things also which successful people possesses. One of which is a satisfaction. Contentment is presumed to give pleasure, joy and happiness. Because if some one is not happy with his or her life then reaching at the top is meaningless.
Furthermore, sometimes people are so occupied in running behind it that they forget they have families and friends also. Victory is something which is better if celebrated with others. It has been witnessed many a times that people with every comfort, fame and wealth have everything but left with nothing. Since they do not have anyone around them.

To conclude, I can confidently say that money has never had, never been and can never be the only fundamental for true triumph.