IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200111
TOPIC: Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer 1
There is no doubt, an unprecedented transformation in the natural environment gets an adverse impact on the earth. Some people believe that it creates more business opportunities, while others condemn this notion. Although, according to my perspective, it gets a more detrimental impact on the whole world but brings ...
By jarry, 2020-04-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 388
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(18) IMPACT(8) BUSINESS(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
This topic isn't easy to answer offhand. The essay's reasoning isn't strong. Besides, the original version has some syntax defects.