IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people think spoken communication is more powerful than written communication. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200112
TOPIC: Some people think spoken communication is more powerful than written communication. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
On no account should the importance of communication be ignored. I strongly disagree that the oral way to communicate is more powerful than written communication. Firstly, this essay will discuss the strength of speaking, and secondly, the benefits of using written language will be analyzed.
The primary reason why ...
By Julia, 2020-04-18  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 296
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7
Excellent essay. You may divide the 3rd paragraph to 2 to improve the structure.
Answer 2
People are divided into the opinion of whether spoken communication is more fruitful as compared to the written. Lots of individual advocates that speaking language is worthwhile for people, whereas others condemn this notion. Although both play a crucial role in people's life, spoken language is quite beneficial for ...
By jarry, 2020-04-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 350
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has PEOPLE(14) COMMUNICATION(10) THAT(9); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • You can improve coherence and cohesion by sharpening sentences and paragraphs with accurate linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
The essay didn't answer the question well. The logic and reasoning need to enhance, especially about 'writing language'. Besides, the structure of the essay has room to improve.