IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming community building. What are the possible causes and solutions?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200115
TOPIC: People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming community building. What are the possible causes and solutions?
Answer 1
It is no doubt in the present scenario that people have not been to mingle with their neighbours and community. There is numerous reason behind this, such as burgeoning the criminal activities and busy working schedule. It is the mutual efforts of both the civic body and individual to mitigate this problem. I will ...
By jarry , 2020-04-25  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 384
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(20) PEOPLE(12) WITH(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Excellent essay. But it still has a few grammar errors. The conclusion should be enhanced.