IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Scientific research should be funded by governments rather than commercial organisations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #22001162
TOPIC: Scientific research should be funded by governments rather than commercial organisations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
The scientific organization plays a crucial role in the progress of the nation. Some people believe that new research and innovation provide expenditure to these organizations by the civic body, whereas opponents argue that private companies are more beneficial for these organizations. Although I agree with this view ...
By jarry, 2020-05-02  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 385
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has ORGANIZATION(10) AND(9) SCIENTIFIC(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
The question is too big and not easy to write, you may need to refine the essay's logic. The basic frame is ok, but not very persuasive.