TOPIC: Some people think that children should not watch television as it has negative effects, while others believe that they should watch television as it helps them in their future. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Over the past few decades, societies at large have witnessed tremendous growth, and revolutionary changes have been the cornerstone of this multifaceted progress. It may not be a hyperbole to state that the Television and its widespread usage has been a core element and inviolable subset of this matrix of development. ...
Total words: 409
- The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
- You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has THAT(14) TELEVISION(10) AND(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
- High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
- Obvious Grammar Errors: 2>.
Too long, shrink it 10%. It's better to state your view in the introduction clearly.