It has been observed that most of the students at University do not choose science to study. Why does it happen? What are the effects on society?
Popularity among the pupils. Some people assert that in these days, student takes more interest in information technology, engineering, and management-related subjects at tertiary education rather than the medical field. I will not only elaborate on this notion but also share some adverse impact on society decreases ...
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Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Excellent writing, but a little wordy, suggest to shrink it.
Judging from various polls, majority undergraduates opt for Humanities followed by Business and Management, with science lagging far behind. In this essay, an astute scrutiny will pinpoint that several factors influence their choice, which in turn affects the world as a whole.
Simply stating, educatees just do not ...
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Band: 5.5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Grammar and vocabulary are good, as well as reasoning, but the fluency and conclusion have room to refine. Besides, religion-related examples should be cautious not to offend 'Political correctness.'