IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people believe that school should no longer be necessary because children can obtain information from the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Question:
Some people believe that school should no longer be necessary because children can obtain information from the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Answer 1
The advent of the internet has changed many aspects of human life, from economic to social dimensions. It is argued that the internet provides a wide array of educational materials and potentially replace the education system at school. I firmly disagree with this notion, and the presence of formal education of school ...
By GP, 2020-05-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 279
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Excellent essay. Suggest to enhance the latter part, or consider to add one more support point.
Answer 2
School is playing an integral role in pupils life without teacher children cannot obtain knowledge during the initial stage. Some people believe that the proliferation demand of internet child can easily attain knowledge from it, whereas others argue that wireless connection cannot replace the value of a teacher. I ...
By jarry, 2020-03-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 438
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
The introduction and conclusion should be rewritten. And by the original version, its syntax should be improved.
Answer 3
Nowadays, the majority of people believe that school is lower demanded than the past by as the development of the internet intervene to help students access knowledge more efficiently. However, I think that school is essential to personal growth as it shapes humanities and promotes different interests of humans by ...
By Siiiilvia, 2020-05-06  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 305
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Structure and reasoning are good. But you should use school, not college, as examples to discuss. Besides, the original version has too heavy grammar errors.
Enhance your grammar:
https://www.examword.com/elementary-grammar/