IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Many people consider that film as a form of art is less important than paintings and literature, do you agree or disagree?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200318
TOPIC: Many people consider that film as a form of art is less important than paintings and literature, do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
People are divided into the views, whether which form of art is most popular in today's films and painting, literature. Some people believe that movies play a crucial role in people life and the better part of the entertainment, however, opponents argue that painting and literature is an ancient form of art. Although ...
By jarry, 2020-04-10  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 499
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(24) ARE(11) FILMS(10); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Too wordy to merit higher mark. IELTS test takers should use 250-350 words to show writing skills. The longer, the more errors; so please refine or shrink it.
Answer 2
Nowadays, many people believe that paintings and literature are the real form of art rather than film. I partially agree with this opinion.
Paintings and literature can show the real skill of a person, which can portray the reality of life through various ways such as canvas, oil painting, sketch, poetry, story, ...
By anurav, 2020-04-08  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 344
AI Comment:
  • The introduction isn't strong enough, suggest to enhance it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(8) ARE(7) ART(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Nice essay, logic is sound, although it seems unfair to movies. Try to polish it like IELTS writing. By the way, Avengers isn't a good example here.
Answer 3
There is a heated discussion on the issue of either classic art or films have more effects on the human community. While to some extent, classic art is important to the human world, convinced that film's effect also mater. I believe that the latter opinion can be justified and will further examine both sides of the ...
By chouray, 2020-04-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 286
AI Comment:
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Good writing. You may state your view clearly at the beginning. The original version seems wordy. You should rely on logic but not words like "indeed" to connect sentences.