IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people think it is one of the best ways to solve environmental problems by increasing the cost of fuels for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200717
TOPIC: Some people think it is one of the best ways to solve environmental problems by increasing the cost of fuels for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
Nowadays, environmental issues such as air and water pollutions are associated with a high level of fuel discharge. Some individuals believe that the best way to solve this problem is to increase the fuel cost for vehicles. I think that it is reasonable to say that the higher cost might help to deal with waste ...
By Strlight, 2020-07-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 259
AI Comment:
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of the second point.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation, try to use less common vocabulary for a higher band.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-a few grammatical errors, such as article (a, an, the).
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Answer 2
One way to combat environmental issues is by increasing the prices for car fuels. While the combustion of fuel releases a significant amount of greenhouse gasses like carbon dioxide, it is not the only source of pollution. In my opinion, it is not the best way to solve the expanding threat to our environment, as there ...
By tania, 2020-07-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 340
AI Comment:
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
-The example (electric car) isn't persuasive here, it's expensive too.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy.
Answer 3
It is often argued that environmental issues can be best solved by an increment in fuel prices, which is used in distinct modes of transportation. This essay agrees with the given information because it would reduce the pollution level and further diminish the exploitation of resources.
To commence with, undeniably, ...
By KM, 2020-07-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 280
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident, with some simple cohesive devices, but sometimes used inaccurately.
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Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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Answer 4
Over the past few decades the consumption of fuels in all sorts of means of transport, especially cars, has increased exponentially. Worried over the rate at which this consumption is happening and its impact on the environment, some people feel that increasing the fuel prices will be one of the best solutions to curb ...
By elton, 2020-07-18  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 316
AI Comment:
  • Paragraph 2 is relatively short, enrich it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(14) THIS(7) FUELS(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
-Off-topic a little, the raters may doubt the essay is memorized. Your second and third paragraphs don't matter with the topic "increasing the cost of fuels." Please prepare topics (not essays) in advance.
Answer 5
Many people believe that the pressing issues of the environment can be curbed by raising the price of automobiles and fuel. This essay agrees with this viewpoint as it can lead to less pollution and traffic on the roads.
Primarily, the majority of the people are concerned about the heightened problem of the ...
By ray, 2020-07-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 312
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-Off-topic a little, the raters may doubt the essay is memorized, please prepare topics (not essays) in advance.
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-There is some misunderstanding of the task. The question is about "cost of fuels", not car.
-The example (North America) isn't persuasive here, seems a fake one to count word number.
Answer 6
Environmental pollution has shown a dramatic rise in the past decades. Some people believe that congestion of vehicles is the leading cause creating such problems, and an increase in fuel price may reduce this issue. However, I disagree with this opinion to some extent because unaffordable fuel prices would not be much ...
By AH, 2020-07-25  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 260
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-Only partially address the prompt.
-The essay misses the focus "agree or disagree" it shouldn't matter with "solutions". You are off-topic in the latter part.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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Answer 7
In the modern era, environmental problems and its causes are sparked heated topics in many parts of the world. Many people postulate that the most effective solution to environmental issues is to increase the price of fuel for vehicles. I personally believe that there are many ways to solve this issue, and it will be ...
By Vaimik, 2020-07-25  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 253
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
Task Response:
-Don't express a clear position in the whole essay.
-You need to put forward more reasons for your position.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The response is organized into paragraphs, but the focus of each is not always clear, e.g. the second paragraph is for agrre or disagree?
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Some grammatical errors, such as nouns (singular, plural).
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