Amongst the significant issue of contemporary society is desperately struggling from the countless number of advertising, which has a detrimental impact on their health and budget, has direct attention of the government and individuals to itself. Nevertheless, some useful solutions could be adopted to combat this ...
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy and not in the style that academic writing should be in.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression, but USSR isn't a good example. It lacked goods, not ads.
-There are spelling errors; these impede communications, even like simple words "goods", "food"
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-The variety of structures would suggest Band 6 on Grammar, but the errors sometimes impede communication.
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