IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Consumers often face an overwhelming amount of advertising from competing companies. To what extent does advertising make influences on consumers? How to protect them from such influences?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200903
TOPIC: Consumers often face an overwhelming amount of advertising from competing companies. To what extent does advertising make influences on consumers? How to protect them from such influences?
Answer 1
Amongst the significant issue of contemporary society is desperately struggling from the countless number of advertising, which has a detrimental impact on their health and budget, has direct attention of the government and individuals to itself. Nevertheless, some useful solutions could be adopted to combat this ...
By Farhad, 2020-09-04  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 292
AI Comment:
  • Paragraph 2 is relatively short, enrich it.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy and not in the style that academic writing should be in.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression, but USSR isn't a good example. It lacked goods, not ads.
Lexical Resources:
-There are spelling errors; these impede communications, even like simple words "goods", "food"
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-The variety of structures would suggest Band 6 on Grammar, but the errors sometimes impede communication.
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