IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: People rely on cars to commute to work. If the use of cars is unlimited, what problems does it cause? To reduce the problems, should we discourage people from using cars?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200916
Question:
People rely on cars to commute to work. If the use of cars is unlimited, what problems does it cause? To reduce the problems, should we discourage people from using cars?
Answer 1
Undoubtedly, cars have been a common means of transportation for people while travelling to their work premises. The extensive utilization of such vehicles can give birth to the burgeoning traffic congestion and air pollution. Therefore, I have an assertion that awareness among citizens to limit its use is ...
By Maya kaur, 2020-09-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 304
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
-The example "cabs" isn't persuasive here, the topic should focus on cars.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy.
Answer 2
Nowadays, residents prefer driving cars to work. In my opinion, I suppose that this phenomenon causes a great number of problems. Therefore, it is necessary to limit car users.
There are many disadvantages to using too many cars. First, people's driving cars to work can contribute to traffic congestion, especially ...
By Ve, 2020-09-24  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 283
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy.
-The solution paragraph shouldn't be there, it hurts the essay's structure.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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-and nouns (singular, plural).
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Answer 3
Many people often have to travel long distances to go to work. This essay will point out that, given that the use of vehicles is out of control, it would cause environmental and traffic problems. People should be encouraged to find a substitution for cars to avoid the above issues.
With the unconstrained use of cars ...
By kinoko, 2020-09-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 321
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-You need to put forward more reasons for why you agree with the statement, the essay doesn't need any solution to address the issue.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The response is organized into paragraphs, but the focus of each is not always clear.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 4
The majority of the working class use their personal cars to travel to their respective offices. There is no limitation in doing so, and this essay believes that a major problem that this may cause is a high volume of car traffic in urban areas. One solution that may solve this problem is accessible, reliable, and ...
By erecuh, 2020-11-12  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 309
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Off-topic a little, the raters may doubt the essay is memorized, please prepare topics (not essays) in advance.
Coherence and Cohesion.
-Missed the second question "should we discourage people from using cars."
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 5
Due to technological advancement, all spheres of life have revolutionized drastically, and the transportation industry is no exception. Nowadays, everyone owns the car who can afford it from the cheapest to the expensive. As a result, it causes many issues to an environment as well as to society. I shall delve into ...
By Abhishek Dabhi, 2020-09-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 355
Band: 5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Off-topic a little, the raters may doubt the essay is memorized, please prepare topics (not essays) in advance.
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The essay seems good in writing skills, but the question is on "cars to commute", don't ask anything about how to "solve it."