IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Mobile phones have made life easier: anyone can use a mobile phone to answer/make calls or home calls at any place 7 days a week. Do you think this development has more positive effects or negative effects on individuals and society?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2200926
TOPIC: Mobile phones have made life easier: anyone can use a mobile phone to answer/make calls or home calls at any place 7 days a week. Do you think this development has more positive effects or negative effects on individuals and society?
Answer 1
The proliferation of the internet changed the face of communication media. The usage of mobile phones in day to day life in society produced an easier way of life. In my opinion, this development has more beneficial to individuals and society rather than a disadvantage.

It is true that the utilization of cellular ...
By mannat, 2020-09-28  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 283
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 8.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-There is some misunderstanding of the task. You should develop at both "individuals and society" for your position. "negative effects" aren't important in the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 2
Communication is the key in the fast-paced world, and gadgets have made it easier without a doubt. In my opinion, mobile phones' usage has ann overall positive effect even though there are some disadvantages. This essay will discuss both views.
Mobile phones have become an important part of our lives. This device ...
By Krayan, 2020-10-02  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 281
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Task Response:
-There is some misunderstanding of the task. You don't need show views of two sides. Instead, you should take one position, and develop by both "individuals and society."
Coherence and Cohesion:
-It is an attempt to address the prompt, and some main ideas are put forward.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, such as "lfes" twice occured, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Some grammatical errors, such as article (a, an, the).
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