IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people think that it's good for a country's culture if people watch some imported film or TV programs while some people argue that it could be better if people watch films of their own culture. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2201017
Question:
Some people think that it's good for a country's culture if people watch some imported film or TV programs while some people argue that it could be better if people watch films of their own culture. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer 1
Some consider that importing films and TV programs from overseas is beneficial for a country's culture, while others believe that they should be produced locally. In my opinion, both local and imported movies and TV shows have important benefits for a country's culture.
On the one hand, when people from a particular ...
By Catailla, 2020-10-21  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 342
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a wide range of structures, these are used flexibly; however, there are occasional errors in punctuation, some sentences are wordy.
Answer 2
Even though imported foreign films and TV programs are really good to discover new cultures, I strongly believe that each country should develop its movie industry.
For a start, every single nation should let films from foreign countries play on their screens, and people from this nation should have the right to ...
By Anfel, 2020-10-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 332
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The essay misses the focus, you should present views from two sides by the question. You actully off-topic a little, the raters may doubt the essay is memorized, please prepare topics (not essays) in advance.
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Coherence and Cohesion:
-Try to use paragraphs to present ideas logically, but paragraphing isn't adequate.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 3
Films and TV programs are frequently discussed themes these days; particularly doubtable questions should TV programs include shows about foreign countries' culture. While some people believe in its benefits, others argue that countries should focus more on their own TV shows. This essay will discuss both sides of view ...
By Ayazhan, 2020-10-22  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 294
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed, there is an attempt to discuss 2 sides, but ideas are limited.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression in the response, but somewhat mechanically, with occasional errors
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Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
- Help Link
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-some grammatical errors, such as article (a, an, the).
- Help Link1, Help Link2