IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: There have been many inventions in human history, such as wheels. Some people think the most important thing is the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2201025
TOPIC: There have been many inventions in human history, such as wheels. Some people think the most important thing is the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Answer 1
People had started inventing new creations since the Stone Age. Nowadays, people are creating various kinds of technology all over the world. The Internet is both path of new technology and influence things in the world. Consequently, some people said that the internet was the most important and powerful key in ...
By Myat Pwint Phyu, 2020-11-05  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 337
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(12) ARE(10) TECHNOLOGY(9); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 11.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the), and nouns (singular, plural).
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Answer 2
The majority believe that new inventions have changed a human being's life in enormous ways; even the internet is no exception. There is no doubt the internet has provided ample facilities in individual life. Still, I can't entirely agree with this statement. Other discoveries, such as medical and automobile, are more ...
By jarry, 2020-11-04  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 390
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has LIFE(14) AND(13) PEOPLE(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-The variety of structures would suggest higher score on Grammar, but the errors sometimes impede communication.
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