IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: There have been many inventions in human history, such as wheels. Some people think the most important thing is the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2201025
Question:
There have been many inventions in human history, such as wheels. Some people think the most important thing is the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Answer 1
People had started inventing new creations since the Stone Age. Nowadays, people are creating various kinds of technology all over the world. The Internet is both path of new technology and influence things in the world. Consequently, some people said that the internet was the most important and powerful key in ...
By Myat Pwint Phyu, 2020-11-05  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 337
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the), and nouns (singular, plural).
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Answer 2
The majority believe that new inventions have changed a human being's life in enormous ways; even the internet is no exception. There is no doubt the internet has provided ample facilities in individual life. Still, I can't entirely agree with this statement. Other discoveries, such as medical and automobile, are more ...
By jarry, 2020-11-04  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 390
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-The variety of structures would suggest higher score on Grammar, but the errors sometimes impede communication.
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