Whether or not one can achieve his or her aims is mostly a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Most people believe that destiny is more significant to achieve their goals; however, successful people ponder that hard work and dedication towards their goals are key to success. I can't entirely agree with this statement that people can achieve their aim with the help of destiny. This essay will discuss this notion ...
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Band: 6The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident, with some simple cohesive devices, but sometimes used inaccurately.
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-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Whether or not success in life depends on luck or other factors has been brought into focus for some time. I will further elaborate on the reasons and give my opinion in the following paragraphs.
There are several reasons why some people believe that fortune is an important factor in success. Firstly, good fortune ...
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Band: 5.5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy and not in the style that academic writing should be in.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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