IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: The environmental problem in the world cannot be solved by ordinary people because they can do little to change the situation. It is the responsibility of politicians. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2201114
TOPIC: The environmental problem in the world cannot be solved by ordinary people because they can do little to change the situation. It is the responsibility of politicians. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
Environmental problems such as ice-melting and the greenhouse effect have become increasingly severe in the last decades. Some people argue that only governments and large companies can address problems while people are too limited to make a difference. From my own perspective, not only authorities and big enterprises ...
By Sevara, 2020-11-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 308
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 8.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are logically organized, and there is a clear progression throughout the response.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a good range of vocabulary, and there are some less common words and phrases
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a variety of complex structures with frequent error-free sentences and good control over grammar and punctuation.
Answer 2
As time goes by, more and more people realize that our problems related to the environment are not solved by having a division in opinion. Some blame the governments for doing too little for the environment, while others hold ordinary people accountable for the problems. I think that both ordinary people and people in ...
By alxin, 2020-11-15  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 380
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(18) PEOPLE(17) ENVIRONMENT(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-It is a good response that would achieve an even higher score if you refine some wordy sentences.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but there are errors in grammatical control, such as article (a, an, the).
- Help Link1, Help Link2
Answer 3
There is a contentious argument over whether a normal person can fix the environmental issue globally as their contribution is minor to the ongoing problem. I can't entirely agree with this opinion because every individual is responsible for stopping using plastic items to save the earth and use fewer motor vehicles on ...
By Asha, 2020-11-16  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 254
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 2.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but further support and development would be necessary to achieve a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Use a variety of complex structures, but some sentences lack grammatical control.
- Help Link
Answer 4
There is a school of thought that the environmental problem could only be solved by the politicians who are very powerful at policymaking, and ordinary people are useless to do the same things.
However, I can't entirely agree with this opinion. In my opinion, both individuals and politicians are important in ...
By Hui, 2020-11-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 262
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(6) ENVIRONMENTAL(5) PROBLEM(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Paragraph 2 seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression. But paragraphs are rather short, due to a lack of development of ideas.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task with few errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.