IELTS Academic Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people think young people should be required to have full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Question:
Some people think young people should be required to have full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
People nowadays go to great lengths to ensure education is not a privilege but a right. That goes to tell the pivotal rule it plays in our society. The duration of compulsory education, however, remains incongruent.
Though others might question its necessity, I believe that one should stay in school until one turns ...
By mp, 2020-11-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 254
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok. Further support and development would be necessary to achieve a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.