TOPIC: Some people say that school children should learn how to grow food and cook with it in their lessons. What is your opinion about that?
Some individuals opine that the art of cooking and growing food must be included in the children school curriculum. It brings more positive results in teenage life, and they know about the value of food. I will elaborate on this notion and give my views in the upcoming paragraphs.
Undoubtedly, growing food in the ...
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The structure is ok, but reasoning and logic aren't fluent.