IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Many people believe that modern inventions have brought more problems than the benefits. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons to your answer, and required examples.

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TOPIC: Many people believe that modern inventions have brought more problems than the benefits. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons to your answer, and required examples.
Answer 1
It is irrefutable that contemporary technology has eased the life of enormous individual ways. Some masses argue that discoveries get a negative impact on people, but opponents advocate that it has become boon for folks. Although I disagree with this notion, innovations are a more brighter side, yet some negative side ...
By jarry, 2020-03-22  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 440
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has PEOPLE(11) AND(10) THAT(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 3 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Your essay should have your view, so the introduction and conclusion very important, which let readers your idea clearly. Covid 19 is a good example, but the whole essay seems wordy.