IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people think that the government should increase the tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree?

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200213
TOPIC: Some people think that the government should increase the tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
In the era of technology and globalization, all sphere of life has changed dramatically, and food is also on exception. Some people advocate that higher authority should be burgeoning the duty on unhealthy food to ameliorate the consumption of food. In contrast, others argue that to vigilant people decrease the value ...
By jarry, 2020-03-22  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 485
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has FOOD(22) AND(14) PEOPLE(9); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 8
Perfect essay! The end seems a little hurry, but it's not easy to address the topic in an IELTS writing.
Answer 2
We cannot emphasize the importance of a healthy diet too much because the junk food does harm to our health. Some people argue that the tax on junk food should be raised so that people will choose the healthy food instead. From my perspective, I completely disagree with this opinion.
First of all, the drawbacks are ...
By Eva , 2020-03-04  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 344
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has FOOD(16) HEALTHY(11) THAT(9); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
You may enhance "unemployment" point, which is a disadvantage to health.
Answer 3
The problem of unhealthiness among humans is escalating a very high speed, which is a result of their eating habits. Many believe that the heat taxes should be imposed on junk food. I strongly accord with the opinion that authorities must put high taxes on unhealthy products. It will encourage consumers to consume a ...
By Sakshi aggarwal, 2020-02-17  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 246
AI Comment:
  • The essay is less than 250, doesn't match the basic criteria.
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has FOOD(10) TAXES(6) WILL(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
The second paragraph is too long. Rewrite its last sentence. Should add third supporting point. Enhance the conclusion.
Answer 4
It has been seen that people are giving more preference to junk food rather than healthy food. To control this malaise, some people think that the government should come forward and laid high taxes on unhealthy food so that people start giving priority to healthy eating. I think this way will bring benefits but also ...
By Gurjeet , 2020-02-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 317
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has FOOD(16) PEOPLE(10) HEALTHY(9); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Conclusion seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Add another supporting paragraph, enhance the conclusion.
Answer 5
Nutrition plays a vital role in human health. From junk food to healthy, there are a wide variety of options available in the market.
Unhealthy foods are mostly scrumptious to taste but less nutritious. Many people believe that by applying tariffs on unhealthy items will encourage people to eat healthy foods and ...
By AH, 2020-03-09  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 259
AI Comment:
  • The introduction isn't strong enough, suggest to enhance it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
State your opinion in the introduction. Your reasoning doesn't match the question. Instead of talking about how fast food is bad, you should prove how higher taxes fix the issue.