IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: It is better for young people to get the advises from old people than young ones. Do you agree or disagree?

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200308
TOPIC: It is better for young people to get the advises from old people than young ones. Do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
People are divided into their opinion whether they take advice from the youngster and rather than the experienced person. I partially agree with this statement, older people have more experience of whole life, but the youngster has enough knowledge about the latest technology. I will not only elaborate on the value of ...
By jarry, 2020-03-22  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 441
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(17) PEOPLE(15) THEIR(9); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
The essay doesn't match with the question exactly, the logic and reasoning should be refined. Besides, 'divorce rate' isn't a good example here.