IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: More and more people are wearing fashionable clothes. Is it a good or bad situation?

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200314
TOPIC: More and more people are wearing fashionable clothes. Is it a good or bad situation?
Answer 1
Nowadays, materialistic things are considered of more importance rather than spiritual ones by people. That is why they tend to wear expensive and stylish clothes to impress everyone around them. I feel wearing clothes in vogue only wastage of valuable time and money, not a necessary trend to follow.
Being always in ...
By Harjeet Kaur, 2020-09-24  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 283
AI Comment:
  • Paragraph 2 is relatively short, enrich it.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Paragraph 2 seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides, ideas are usually expressed fully, but they sometimes need more support.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is clear overall progression, with your opinion presented at the end.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a good range of vocabulary, and there are some less common words and phrases
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a variety of complex structures with frequent error-free sentences and good control over grammar and punctuation.
Answer 2
People are divided into their opinion whether wearing the latest trend clothes are fruitful for them, or it gets a negative impact on them. Although in my opinion it is more worthwhile for people. I will not only elaborate on the brighter side of fashionable clothes but also share some drawbacks in the upcoming ...
By jarry, 2020-03-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 381
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has CLOTHES(16) PEOPLE(14) AND(12); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Paragraph 3 seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Technically, the conclusion is too weak; politically, "racialism" should be avoided completely from any IELTS essay. You may use positive word, like globalization, ...
Answer 3
The fashion industry is flourishing every day, and the demand for fashionable clothes is increasing. Now the question arises that is it a good or a bad situation? I believe it has both effects. In this essay, I will share some examples in support of my opinion.
One the one hand, it is believed that people who look ...
By Sarita, 2020-05-01  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 269
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Good essay. A standard format for IELTS writing. But suggest not to use "5 lakh" in an international test.
Answer 4
There is increasing popularity of wearing fashionable apparel nowadays. Some people suggest that this is a trend while some others disagree. In my opinion, I believed this is a bad situation, and I will elaborate on this in the following essay.
Although wearing designer clothes could support the aesthetic industry ...
By Rachel, 2020-04-02  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 244
AI Comment:
  • The essay is less than 250, doesn't match the basic criteria.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Actually, the essay is good, but shorter than 250 words. You may add one more point, or enhance the conclusion.
Answer 5
In the contemporary era, the trend of wearing outfits of the latest fashion is increasing continuously. It is irrefutable that the more and more individuals today follow different fashion trends. I believe it worthless and not a good thing, as society is influenced by looks, and it can create a partial environment ...
By Ramandeep, 2020-03-31  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 311
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
The reasoning has a bigger room to improve. The question "fashionable clothes" is hard to connect with "better place to live".