IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people think public libraries are necessary, others believe that the public libraries are useless. What is your opinion and provide with some relevant examples.

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TOPIC: Some people think public libraries are necessary, others believe that the public libraries are useless. What is your opinion and provide with some relevant examples.
Answer 1
In the contemporary era, there is a heated argument regarding the existence of public libraries. The lion's share of people favors it; however, the rest averse it. I believe that public libraries have been playing an indispensable role in the welfare of society, and the following paragraphs would support my opinion ...
By Arfat Ahmad Khan, 2020-05-04  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 333
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has LIBRARIES(10) AND(8) HAVE(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Writing is good, but not like an IELTS essay, which had better be in a more formal style to convince others with facts and logic.
Answer 2
The public library has been one of the most popular destinations for people in the nearby community. However, it has always been the point of debate for people whether libraries are necessary or not. In this essay, we will discuss the various factors why the library is essential for people.
The library has been ...
Total words: 337
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has LIBRARY(11) AND(11) KNOWLEDGE(10); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Structure and reasoning are ok. But the library's activities aren't very persuasive, try other examples. Besides, the original version has too heavy grammar errors.
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