IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: In some countries, governments pay unemployed people on a weekly basis. How would this impact people as well as the government? Do you agree or disagree with that?

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TOPIC: In some countries, governments pay unemployed people on a weekly basis. How would this impact people as well as the government? Do you agree or disagree with that?
Answer 1
All developed economies have special financial programs to support unemployed citizens. However, the extending of such financing is debatable as many are in favor of such benefits and allowances, while others ultimately vote against it.
Unemployment benefits are for the individuals who either are unable to find a ...
By NM, 2020-05-26  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 257
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is wordy, suggest to simplify it.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7
Excellent essay. Current coronavirus is an example of this topic.
Answer 2
One of the functions of the government is to be responsible for people's welfare. In some countries, the government gives subsidies to citizens who do not work, so they still can support their lives. However, these can create several effects.
First, the financial aid given by the government will burden the ...
By susi arsiyanti, 2020-05-27  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 272
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has THEY(11) GOVERNMENT(10) CAN(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Paragraph 3 seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Good essay, but it has some grammar defects, like "this negative conditions." The conclusion should be rephrased more clearly.
Answer 3
The government of some countries takes initiatives to protect its unemployed citizens with wage subsidies or weekly pay. I believe that such schemes are beneficial to specific individuals. At the same time, I agree with the fact that it can have a damaging effect on a few sections of the society and the government ...
By Unni, 2020-05-25  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 319
AI Comment:
  • You had better rewrite the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(9) GOVERNMENT(6) THAT(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 5.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Good IELTS essay, response to the question well. But you should enhance grammar skills, at least avoid errors like "they becomes."
Answer 4
Due to the pandemic of COVID-19, plenty of people lose their jobs, and it seems reasonable to pay these people unemployment benefits. In my opinion, this does more harm than good both to the government and taxpayers.
Paying the unemployed does bring some positive effects. The most apparent benefit might be that when ...
By DENG, 2020-06-03  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 269
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Language skills are ok, but the essay doesn't answer the question in the right way. It's about "governments and unemployed people". You may use coronavirus as an example but cannot switch the focus.