IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Many people think dangerous sports should be banned. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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Question:
Many people think dangerous sports should be banned. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.
Answer 1
The unprecedented growth of accidents in dangerous sports has become a major threat to participants. The myriad of individuals argues that life-threatening sports should be prohibited, whereas others are opposed to this statement. I am at loggerhead with this statement. Those sports should be played under professional ...
By jarry , 2020-10-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 364
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Ideas relating to each sector mentioned in the prompt are presented, but there is not much development of some.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-A range of cohesive devices is used flexibly, while each paragraph has a clear central topic that is developed.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but there are errors in grammatical control
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Answer 2
Whether extreme sports should be forbidden or not has always been a hot debate topic. Some argue that it should be restricted as it causes deaths and injuries. In contrast, others take it as a consequence of being careless, and everyone should be responsible for their own decisions. This essay will give reasons why ...
By Kinoko, 2020-10-02  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 308
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, but the essay didn't use less common vocabulary with accuracy.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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