IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some people believe that an effective way to reduce industrial pollution is to tax the companies which cause these types of pollution. others think that there are other ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200526
TOPIC: Some people believe that an effective way to reduce industrial pollution is to tax the companies which cause these types of pollution. others think that there are other ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Answer 1
Some take the stance that imposing a duty on the industries which produce pollution is the only potential method to cut down the pollution level. In contrast, the alternative belief is to take many other measures to curb such an issue. In this essay, I am going to examine this question from both points of view, which ...
By essemm, 2020-06-02  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 322
AI Comment:
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has THIS(8) INDUSTRIES(7) POLLUTION(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 7
Excellent essay; just has a few tiny defects in grammar.
Answer 2
The reduction of industrial contamination is often a common debate among individuals. Some think that the most effective solution to this is to tax companies responsible, while others differ and suggest other approaches.
This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments in detail and my opinion.
Firstly, placing ...
By Lanre, 2020-06-01  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 308
AI Comment:
  • You had better rewrite the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(8) THIS(7) POLLUTION(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 9.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Structure and logic are good. But you should force on why tax cannot fix pollution, not the industrial estate. Besides, fake examples may offend raters who hate to be treated as fools and aren't as nice as me.
Answer 3
With the commencing of the industrial revolution, the burning of fossil fuels had a surplus the air pollution to a large extent. Global warming is the indicator of the devastating situation, which assert the importance of controlling greenhouse gases emission. So in that context, many contend that levying taxes on the ...
By Bhathal Bhawan, 2020-06-07  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 360
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has THAT(8) THIS(7) WILL(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • You can improve coherence and cohesion by sharpening sentences and paragraphs with accurate linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 6.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
Language skills are ok, but the response didn't follow the question in the right way. The second paragraph should say why some support the tax, and third is for opponents, your opinion shows in conclusion.
Answer 4
Pollution becomes one of the biggest disasters in today's world as it has been observed that there are a considerable number of industries that are responsible for polluting the environment in different ways. They are either polluting the water environment, which is dangerous for marine animals, or polluting the air ...
By Asma Sajjad, 2020-05-30  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 253
AI Comment:
  • You had better rewrite the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has INDUSTRIES(8) ENVIRONMENT(8) WHICH(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 2.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Response to the question well, but chemicals shouldn't be taken as pollution. The essay's grammar and spelling have space to enhance. Its original version should be under band 5.
Answer 5
Upsurging the demand of industrial pollution has become a significant issue for all over the world. Some people advocate that it is the onus of the civic body should impose a hefty amount of tax if any industry breaks the rules and norms. In contrast, opponents argue that it is not a long term solution for industrial ...
By jarry, 2020-05-30  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 413
AI Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(9) POLLUTION(8) FOR(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Not respond to the question in the right way. It's for pollution and tax, you mentioned tax in the 3rd paragraph, too late. Besides, it has some grammar issues.
Answer 6
Industrial pollution is occurring at a swift pace nowadays. To save the environment has become a global priority in recent years. Some people believe that industries that are causing pollution should be taxed heavily to overcome the problem, whereas others think that it can be controlled in other ways. This essay ...
By Manpreet kaur, 2020-07-10  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 296
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 7.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
The response and logic are good, but the conclusion should be enhanced. Besides, the original version has too many grammar defects.