TOPIC: Some older people struggle with the use of modern electronic technology such as smartphones, computers. What are the reasons and give your solutions.
Seniors in the modern world can be easily overwhelmed by the new technology that surrounds them. Although the number of older people with computer skills grows every day, a massive chunk of this demographic still stays computer illiterate. This essay will discuss the causes and solutions to remedy this situation ...
Total words: 283
- High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
- Obvious Grammar Errors: 4>.
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence/grammar forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication, like " to not underestimate" should be "not to underestimate".