IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some older people struggle with the use of modern electronic technology such as smartphones, computers. What are the reasons and give your solutions.

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200530
Question:
Some older people struggle with the use of modern electronic technology such as smartphones, computers. What are the reasons and give your solutions.
Answer 1
Seniors in the modern world can be easily overwhelmed by the new technology that surrounds them. Although the number of older people with computer skills grows every day, a massive chunk of this demographic still stays computer illiterate. This essay will discuss the causes and solutions to remedy this situation ...
By AD, 2020-09-14  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 283
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence/grammar forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication, like " to not underestimate" should be "not to underestimate".
Answer 2
Many fancy gadgets have been released in the market in recent years. The more functions are hidden in those devices, the greater difficulty for the elderly to use it. This essay will explain why the older generations find it hard to control such electronic gadgets and suggest solutions to their obstacles.
Nowadays, ...
By Kinoko, 2020-10-01  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 336
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response; but you may enhance solution a little for higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.
Answer 3
There is no doubt older people are facing difficulty in using electronic gadgets in daily life. The major reason for this issue is that the old generation is not habitual of electronics equipment and hesitate to use it. This essay will discuss the cause of this problem and measure how to mitigate this issue ...
By Jarry, 2020-10-01  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 372
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generlly arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary. E.g. avoid non-academic "all over the world", but use "worldwide"
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical errors are frequent, such as article (a, an, the).
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