IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some older people struggle with the use of modern electronic technology such as smartphones, computers. What are the reasons and give your solutions.

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200530
TOPIC: Some older people struggle with the use of modern electronic technology such as smartphones, computers. What are the reasons and give your solutions.
Answer 1
Seniors in the modern world can be easily overwhelmed by the new technology that surrounds them. Although the number of older people with computer skills grows every day, a massive chunk of this demographic still stays computer illiterate. This essay will discuss the causes and solutions to remedy this situation ...
By AD, 2020-09-14  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 283
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 4.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6.5
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence/grammar forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication, like " to not underestimate" should be "not to underestimate".