TOPIC: Some sports are extremely dangerous to the players. Why do people participate in such sports? Tell some measures to avoid the risks involved.
Playing sports lead to an active and healthy lifestyle. In this world of innovation, everybody has become a slave of growing technology. To take some time apart from the technical world, sports are playing a great role. However, some sports such as Hockey, Football, and many more are proved as extremely dangerous for ...
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- Obvious Grammar Errors: 8>.
The essay has 4 dangling modifiers, like "To avoid this". The grammar has room to refine. Besides, the question is about why some like "dangerous" sports, not sports have risks.