IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some sports are extremely dangerous to the players. Why do people participate in such sports? Tell some measures to avoid the risks involved.

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Question:
Some sports are extremely dangerous to the players. Why do people participate in such sports? Tell some measures to avoid the risks involved.
Answer 1
Nowadays, dangerous sports have been gaining more popularity worldwide, and participants take part in these sports with full of zeal and enthusiasm. But the majority of people ponder that these types of thrilling sports are harmful to players' life. This essay will discuss why people ardent to participate in perilous ...
By jarry, 2020-09-28  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 372
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, but the solution part is too weak; the essay's structure isn't balanced.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically,
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Some grammatical errors, such as nouns (singular, plural).
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Answer 2
Playing sports lead to an active and healthy lifestyle. In this world of innovation, everybody has become a slave of growing technology. To take some time apart from the technical world, sports are playing a great role. However, some sports such as Hockey, Football, and many more are proved as extremely dangerous for ...
By Kavita Nibhani, 2020-06-16  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 293
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
The essay has 4 dangling modifiers, like "To avoid this". The grammar has room to refine. Besides, the question is about why some like "dangerous" sports, not sports have risks.