IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: Some sports are extremely dangerous to the players. Why do people participate in such sports? Tell some measures to avoid the risks involved.

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4200604
TOPIC: Some sports are extremely dangerous to the players. Why do people participate in such sports? Tell some measures to avoid the risks involved.
Answer 1
Playing sports lead to an active and healthy lifestyle. In this world of innovation, everybody has become a slave of growing technology. To take some time apart from the technical world, sports are playing a great role. However, some sports such as Hockey, Football, and many more are proved as extremely dangerous for ...
By Kavita Nibhani, 2020-06-16  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 293
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 8.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
The essay has 4 dangling modifiers, like "To avoid this". The grammar has room to refine. Besides, the question is about why some like "dangerous" sports, not sports have risks.