IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: In many countries traditions and customs are disappearing. What are the reasons? What should schools and parents do to keeping our traditions alive?

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TOPIC: In many countries traditions and customs are disappearing. What are the reasons? What should schools and parents do to keeping our traditions alive?
Answer 1
Traditions and customs are a crucial part of a country. In today's world, the disappearance of these two can be seen, and the causes of this are not really obvious, but we can surely describe them one by one. Let us dredge deeper and discuss the matter in detail.
There is no smoke without fire. Modernization can be ...
By Mannat , 2020-06-19  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 255
AI Comment:
  • Paragraph 2 is relatively short, enrich it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has THEIR(12) CAN(11) AND(10); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 3.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
The response is ok, covers the question in a short essay.
Answer 2
Traditions and customs are the golden symbols of cultural wealth and proudness of any country. Unfortunately, nowadays, most of the countries' precious symbols, are vanishing drastically, due to change in human lifestyle, and rapid technological advances. To save these valuable signs, parents and schools must ...
By Daoud Heraoui, 2020-06-18  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 347
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(22) TRADITIONS(11) THEIR(10); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 9.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5
The response isn't good, doesn't present clear descriptions of either reason or solution.