IELTS General Essay Answers

Test materials of writing task 2: The age at which people have children has risen. Some people believe that because of this, families and countries will suffer some problems. What is your opinion?

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TOPIC: The age at which people have children has risen. Some people believe that because of this, families and countries will suffer some problems. What is your opinion?
Answer 1
There is no doubt that these days most people prefer to have children at a later age. Some individuals consider that due to this trend, families and nations will have to face specific problems. This essay disagrees with the given statement because there are various advantages associated with this phenomenon, which will ...
By Simmi, 2020-07-13  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 280
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 6
The response is excellent in both logic and structure, your language skills are good too. Pay attention to tiny syntax defects.
Answer 2
The age at which people have children is increasing more and more. Some people believe that families and countries have some adverse effects because of this. This essay explains my views on the age that people have children and if it hurts the family and country.
It is usually said that the best age of having ...
Total words: 306
AI Comment:
  • You had better rewrite the essay to 4 or 5 paragraphs.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(17) CHILDREN(11) THEIR(11); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 2.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
Your response is ok, but the conclusion needs to rephrase. Besides, the original version has too many grammar errors.
Answer 3
What is the right age of having a baby is one of the most common topics among young couples nowadays. However, most of them strongly believe that it should be late still; some people say that this decision of new family planning affects not only their family but also the nation. I believe the same, and if this matter ...
By saba khilji, 2020-07-13  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 260
AI Comment:
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 0.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
The response is ok in both logic and structure, but language skills need to be enhanced, the original version has too many grammar errors.
Answer 4
It is commonly seen nowadays that people tend to have babies at a late age due to their professional as well as personal lifestyle. It is certainly a negative trend for families and the nation. The various factors to prove it are discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
Grandparents always have a desire to make a ...
By Simran , 2020-07-14  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 252
AI Comment:
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Obvious Grammar Errors: 1.
Tutor Comment:
Band 5.5
The response is ok in both logic and structure, but language skills need to be enhanced, the original version has some grammar and vocabulary errors.