IELTS Academic Writing Task 2

IELTS writing tasks' topics, answers, and comments.

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By Danlu Y, 2018-02-12  
Band: NA (Total words: 370)
Comment:
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has LIFESTYLE(17) HEALTHY(13) AND(12); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
 IELTS Academic Writing Task 2 - Topic, Answer, and Comment
Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Write at least 250 words.
Lifestyle is eventually a choice of person; but healthy lifestyle sometimes becomes an issue to debate. According to some, healthy lifestyle is as other lifestyle determined by individuals; while others believe that the government should take care of all citizens' healthcare and either is lifestyle. Personally, I believe that healthy lifestyle is a choice that should be made by each individual while the government of a country should guarantee proper treatment and healthy lifestyle facilities.

On one hand, if an individual has the determination of leading a healthy life, he would need very little help from the state. The healthy lifestyle is a habit and this is a choice made by an individual. The government can make sure better healthcare, exercise and entertainment facilities throughout the country but if someone does not have the habit of leading a healthy life, the government has nothing to do about it. Interestingly, this is a choice we can make regardless of our social and economic status. For instance, a man with a lot of money might live an unhealthy lifestyle while someone with a very little earning can decide to live a good and healthy lifestyle. Thus healthy lifestyle is a choice that should be decided by individuals rather than the government of a country. It is evident that family can contribute a lot to teach a child to choose a good and healthy lifestyle.

On the other hand, there is no denying the fact that, a government also has an important role to play to ensure a better lifestyle of its citizens. For instance, in countries where the government fails to ensure proper education, health care facilities, recreation and economic development, people usually lead unhealthy life there. Some important laws and policies like drug controlling can determine the extent of people’s healthy lifestyle. Thus it is true that government policy and initiatives help citizens to have a better lifestyle.

Considering both viewpoints, I would like to conclude that healthy lifestyle of citizens in a country is a combination of individual choice and government initiatives and policy. Thus personally I feel that each person should choose a healthy lifestyle while the government of a country should ensure proper facilities to make it easier.