IELTS Academic Writing Task 2

IELTS writing tasks' topics, answers, and comments.

By Adedeji victor, 2019-02-02  
Band: NA (Total words: 360)
  • The essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has CHILDREN(10) THIS(7) HAS(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
 IELTS Academic Writing Task 2 - Topic, Answer, and Comment
In many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight.

What do you think are the causes of this?

What solutions can you suggest?

Write at least 250 words.
These days, the rate of child obesity is becoming a major concern among many people in some countries. This essay will discuss the reasons why this problem keep rising and some possible ways to solve it.

One of the causes of child obesity include poor diet. Persistent intake of junks among children has been found to increase the likelihood of the disease. For instance, foods with high cholesterol has been indicated in the case. Additionally, sedentary lifestyle among children is another factor to be considered. Children that do not exercise regularly or that eats indiscriminately will have a higher tendency of coming down with the disease. For example, most obese children are always found of excessive consumption of chocolates, sugars, to mention a few. All in all, the impact of the food industry has also led to the increased incidence of the problem. Many food industries advertise their products often on TV station, newspapers and other forum that easily entice children, leading to rising patronage of their products, consequently leading to higher percentage of obese children.

The problem of child obesity can be solved in many ways. First of all, the government has a major role to play. Promotion of healthy eating habit, encouraging parents to adopt the practice of home cooked meal will go a long way in solving the problem. Statistics shows that such government policy has drastically reduced the fraction of obese children in Nigeria. Furthermore, parent has a role to play as well. They should encourage their children to lead a healthy life. Parent can do this by setting a good example as children tend to emulate their parents. The food industry also has a significant role to play in curbing this menace. They can improve on their products, as this will positively improve the health of the consumers which in this case are children.

To sum up, many are being concerned about the increasing numbers of child obesity in some countries nowadays. It is therefore necessary for both government and individual parent to make provision for solving this problem as soon as possible to promote a healthy population, thus improving the nation's productivity.