Some people believe using modern technology is the best way to record and remember important personal events. Others think the traditional method is better.

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Question:
Some people believe using modern technology (digital photographs, blogs) is the best way to record important personal events. Others think the traditional method (making photo albums, writing diaries) is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer Hints:
You need to discuss the views of the two sides. As for your opinion, modern technology should replace old tools.

Using modern technology
  • Convenient, any time, any place
  • Multiple media, precise
  • Manageable, easy to share
Using traditional way
  • Privacy and personal data safe
  • Cheap and reliable to keep for a long time
  • Easy to handle for older people
Answer 1
With time and technological development, our recording methods have changed. Some people think the more modern, the better...

Modern technology is convenient to access and use. People are easy to take pictures of and record what happens...

However, some still insist on traditional tools, even the paper diary book. The core reason is privacy...

Some people believe modern technology is the best way to record personal events; others think the traditional method is better...
Band: 7.5
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Top 300 Words169 (47%)63 (34%)37%
300 - 1000 Words85 (23%)47 (25%)55%
Over 1000 Words105 (29%)71 (39%)67%
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Link Words: 27 (including link phrase: 3)
Sentences: Number: 27; Average Length: 79 characters; Words/Sentence: 13
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is too long, try to shrink it.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(11), you(7), your(7), record(6), traditional(6), technology(5), people(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides and developing these ideas effectively throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression, with your opinion presented at the end.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, showing an awareness of styles and collocation.