Some people think that Mathematics is the most important subject for school children to study, while some disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Question:
Some people think that Mathematics is the most important subject for school children to study, while some disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer Hints:
It's a relatively easy essay. The primary view should be: Math is an important subject, but some others are equally important.

Agree
  • Math is the basis of many other subjects.
  • Math is a primary tool in modern engineering and technology.
  • Life needs mathematical knowledge.
  • Beyond math knowledge, it is a tool to develop logic and ingenuity.
Disagree
  • Children need diverse knowledge, some of which is less math-related, such as language and history.
  • Non-academic activities, such as sports and teamwork, play a crucial role in children's lives.
  • The majority don't need complex math knowledge at work or in their lives after leaving school.
Answer 1
Mathematics has long been regarded as a fundamental subject in education, serving as the basis for numerous scientific and practical applications...

On one hand, supporters of Mathematics argue that it plays a critical role in the development of logical thinking and problem-solving skills...

On the other hand, some believe that placing too much emphasis on Mathematics can overshadow other equally important subjects...

In my opinion, while Mathematics is undeniably essential, it should not be viewed as the most crucial subject for all students...

In conclusion, although Mathematics offers many benefits and should remain a core subject in education, it should not be prioritized above all others...
Band: 7.5
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IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(16), mathematics(8), for(8), that(7), subject(5), not(4), students(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.