Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money

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Question:
Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Answer 1
How do students select majors to study in college. Most of them are for a good and enjoyable job. However, money is still an important factor in job selection, and several people argue that earning money is more important than an enjoyable job...

On the one hand, it is true that, in a way, money leads to a better quality of life. With more money, we can, for instance, consume more, buy good quality products, go on holidays, and do numerous activities...

On the other hand, although money is a way to reach happiness, it may not be enough. It is not by chance that nowadays people seek a job that fits their interests...

In conclusion, I personally think that even though money can help to have a better life, it cannot wholly lead to happiness...
Band: 6.5
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All Words29214047%
Top 300 Words169 (57%)57 (40%)33%
300 - 1000 Words72 (24%)40 (28%)55%
Over 1000 Words51 (17%)43 (30%)84%
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Link Words: 19 (including link phrase: 4)
Sentences: Number: 15; Average Length: 105 characters; Words/Sentence: 19
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(9), that(9), more(9), money(8), job(7), life(5), enjoyable(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Answer 2
Everybody knows that you need money to survive, but it is often said that money does not bring happiness...

On the one hand, life is more accessible for those with plenty of money as they can do what they want and do not have to think constantly about whether they can afford something...

On the other hand, some people spend large sums of money without thinking about it. However, they could manage with less money and have a better life by taking a job they enjoy or working fewer hours...

To sum up, I think having a job you enjoy is more important if you can afford it. In my view, most people need less money than they think because they waste a lot on buying things they do not need...
Band: 5.5
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