Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don't

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #2007
Question:
Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don't. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion.
Answer 1
Sportsmen and women are inspirational idols of young kid. It's common over all the world. In my opinion, youngsters take examples from them on wear style, sport skill, or...
By Elruz Rehimli, 2018-02-12  View full answer
Total words: 283
Band: NA
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Answer 2
People everywhere like watching sports. Many top athletes are admired throughout their countries, and some even have fans all around the world. Young people especially, view...
By Jade Lee, 2017-10-15  View full answer
Total words: 342
Band: NA
  • Avoid using common words repeatedly will show your grammatical range and accuracy. E.g., ATHLETES(12) AND(12) THEIR(9). Try to improve some of them.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.