Developing countries require aid from international organizations; some think this aid should be financial, while others believe practical aid and advice are more useful.

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Question:
Many developing countries require aid from international organizations to grow. Many people think that this aid should be financial, while others believe practical aid and advice are more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer Hints:
The topic needs to discuss views of two sides. All points should be based on the developing countries' circumstances.

The practical aid and advice are put together, but you had better mention them separately.

Financial aid
  • Getting money to buy necessities of life.
  • The quality of life can be improved in the short term.
  • Support developing under intentions of local people.
Practical aid and advice
  • Support and address risk more quickly.
  • Let the poor people get help directly, avoid local corruption.
  • Help to build various facilities and a self-sufficient economy.
Answer 1
Many people think that developing countries need financial support from the international community...

On the one hand, community-based programs and strategic advice are vital for developing countries...

On the other hand, I would argue that financial support from the international community plays a significant role for poor nations...

In conclusion, although specific aid and consultants are beneficial in some ways for developing countries, financial support is more advantageous for third-world countries...
Band: 7.5
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Link Words: 26 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 19; Average Length: 126 characters; Words/Sentence: 18
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(15), for(9), aid(8), could(8), that(7), countries(7), programs(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Answer 2
People have different views about the kind of support wealthy nations should provide for poorer ones...

There are several reasons to believe that practical assistance and advice are what developing countries need...

However, financial support would be more beneficial for poorer nations. One argument is that even valuable ideas for education reform may be irrelevant if a country is financially disadvantaged...

In conclusion, while some argue that foreign aid given to developing countries should be non-financial, it seems that financial support helps these nations escape from poverty...
Band: 7.5
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